By Jack Joseph Smith
Original Scan
AI Interpretation
Sickness is described less as a personal defect than as an environmental catastrophe, a world out of balance where even staying still becomes a dangerous crossing.
That framing makes the page larger than confession. The illness belongs to weather, scale, and perception, and the restored 'vision' line makes the closing loss feel tied to fact and witness.
Illness reframed as cosmic and ecological rather than merely personal: 'My deaster is enviormental', figured as 'Four suns across / a single place'. The speaker insists the sickness reaches back to wonder - 'is not how I felt / When first I saw the sky / open up' - and that catastrophe came from stillness, 'I crossed the line / when I sat still'. The closing maxim ranks the unknowable above any plan: 'chance is further / Even than a bad idea / Even the loss of a vision / That is based on fact'. Source spellings 'deaster' and 'enviormental' are kept verbatim.