Page 417

By Jack Joseph Smith

Slighted The song and the dance and the acting, the music too, to sweep across in color or no color at all, o, an upgrade of thought, I didn't think she cared, cared less; watch the avenue, how to get the right place,, o again back in the country, with nothing to do, on canvess, but finally we did not lose the sea and the money; knowing the tightrope, on the wire; and she refuses to look out her window,. I mean sun light through a drop cloth No balcolny, a ground sized rectangular tile, for me to drink on if I did, falling dead as a door nail; and there you have it the color of me wanting to be in your painting

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GPT

This variant expands 'Slighted' into a page about performance, sea, money, color, country emptiness, and the impossible wish to be included inside someone else's painting.

It is one of the clearer art-and-love pages. Desire here is framed as a wish to become image without losing one's life.

Claude

A fuller, prose-dense reworking of 'Slighted' that opens into performance - 'The song and the dance and the acting, / the music too, to sweep across in color / or no color at all' - and recycles the first version's phrases ('an upgrade of thought', 'I didn't think she cared, cared less', sun light 'through a drop cloth'). The speaker is the tightrope walker, 'knowing the tightrope, / on the wire', and where the companion page gave her a balcony, here he is denied one: 'No balcolny, a ground sized rectangular tile, / for me to drink on if I did', still 'falling dead as / a door nail'. The expanded version makes the wish explicit and naked - 'there you have it the color / of me wanting to be in your painting' - desire reframed as the longing to be admitted into another's picture.