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By Jack Joseph Smith
By Jack Joseph Smith
Original Scan
AI Interpretation
"Ahoy" revises the holler material through rifle, Grateful Dead, coal shale, family money, deer, handwritten place markers, and distance until the banks themselves seem to remember what the speaker failed to keep.
The glimmer is still there, but now it is tangled with commerce, sequence, and inheritance, as if even vision has been monetized by coal. Wyoming and the Moon remain rival fantasies, while the handwritten CAVERN and HER annotations pull the page toward buried place and personal loss. The closing mention of her bones gives the changed smell along the banks a grave-like permanence.
Plo¢ / expanded holler: Grateful Dead on the shoulder, Wyoming over the Moon, deer timing close to true, but the mistake was not taking minutes to walk with her. Smell along banks changed except for yer bones.