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By Jack Joseph Smith

ed a Mie. Ccenn | CArHbare Sen Suggestion: Instead ef the astre prejection, Animal i is pulled frem the ecean by men (Hawaiian) who have: reached him far out fnom' the shore-through the use of surf beards, (The rescue-of Frank Sinatra°as aw example) He is brought back to the island, and there inférmed ‘that he has been saved by a repert: frem the~ Sleeping Beauty. (Her named should be changed from ‘ Lithia to the Brewn Sleeping Beauty in terms of how animal refers to her) This situation would make it possible to cut’ her decussion with the administrator, The epening would then be ‘his directly coming out of the mountains, with no flash backs to her due te the » explangtien given by the Hawaiian men on the beach 5 : after his rescues At big point a helicepter ceuld be - in the sky (already called) te take him te Honoluliy 3 From there the stery continues to Los Angeless SOMke Mak Gol) shit th pot tay pet paingcha Hs. 4 Bint dt Baty ug a

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AI Interpretation

GPT

This page reads as a revision note trying to replace a more abstract rescue with a cleaner, more physical opening rooted in surf, beach, and immediate action.

What matters here is not lyric intensity but narrative control. The writer is testing how to keep the strange atmosphere of the material while making the story more cinematic, more direct, and easier to stage.

Claude

A working note addressed to the author by the author, proposing that Animal be rescued from the ocean by Hawaiian surfers (Sinatra-style) rather than by astral projection, and that Lithia be renamed the Brown Sleeping Beauty. The page is not narrative at all — it is the manuscript showing its own construction, naming plot problems and proposing fixes.